Nowadays, with some problems on economy, most of the people are working in different jobs to be able to pay their fees of rents and universities, so they are fulltime busy, and most of the time they are tired and they couldn’t respond very well, so they’ve faced on some brock off jobs, and they don’t have time to fixed them, so all the things stockpile together. In my opinion, it’s danger for their health, to work for 2 or 3 jobs without resting, just because of making money, the life time is too short and people should enjoy it and have fun with their families.
First, the target of healthy life’s is, how people could enjoy it? But in daily lives of people around us, we just see the people they working because of their payments, but they always angry and depressed. I don’t want be very philosophy or talks about far people, my example is my real life, when I was 24 I gave birth my cutie daughter and I became a single mother, so I had lots of economy problems and I should to take lots of my time to look after my girl, and I had to pay off my student loans, therefore, a lot of things happened and my schedule was messed up. After 2 months I found job as a nurse in hospital, but the salary was not enough after 3 weeks I find another job in fire house, and I bring my daughter to work because she was just 3 mounts year old, but the problem was, these full time working makes me really tired, and I was always sleepy. And because of that in one awful day I had a terrified accident and I had painful spinal injured, and the doctors told me I couldn’t walk again.
The another thing that I really want to talk is about, when people do lots of things together they lose their focused, like as error medical, it’s make a very huge problem, the worst one is, it would be killed people or animals it depends on that surgery how It’s sensitively. For example, in 2012, In Iran country, it was a normal Caesarian surgery, and the doctors and midwifery should have helped together to cut and pull the baby out, and they did it, the doctors came out and said all the things were good but that woman dead after 1 week in being hospitalized, and the nurse said she just dropped down on her bed and after that she was bleeding very badly, after dissected her body they understood the doctors miss a scalpel in her womb while she dropped that cut some issues and she bleeding in some different part and unfortunately, she passed away.
In conclusion, when people work different things together they’ve never done them in right way and it has some danger for their and other people. So the people shouldn’t be selfish, because our life has effective to other and all of our jobs has irreparable consequences. I hope my examples above has sufficient expressed my opinion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... of rents and universities, so they are full time busy, and most of the time they are tir...
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Line 1, column 507, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...ting, just because of making money, the life time is too short and people should enjoy it...
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Line 3, column 808, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ts year old, but the problem was, these full time working makes me really tired, and I wa...
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Line 5, column 800, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'bleeds'.
Suggestion: bleeds
...he dropped that cut some issues and she bleeding in some different part and unfortunatel...
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Line 7, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve has sufficient expressed my opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, so, therefore, well, while, another thing, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46820809249 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47685144576 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485549132948 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 14.0 1.86738351254 750% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 20.1344086022 214% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.843713916 48.9658058833 298% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.25 100.406767564 192% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.25 20.6045352989 210% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.078903567694 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427695718184 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440229333711 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0604411163447 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290872345245 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 11.7677419355 180% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.002688172 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.0537634409 191% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 10.247311828 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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