TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having an appropriate and secure job is always an important matter for all people. While some people think that in the current world it is easier to recognize a secure and successful job, I personally believe that it was more comfortable in the past to understand which job can be secure enough and result in success. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, there were fewer job descriptions for people in the past because they needed fewer services and all jobs did more easier, so people encountered fewer options to choose and the future of the job was clear. To be more specific, the past jobs were not so professional compared to what is going on in today's world. People knew what they have to learn and which skills are needed to find a secure job. In other words, the success path was obvious. In contrast to the past jobs, the current carriers are very professional and people need some specific skills for each especial field and this is a little complex to anticipate the future of that job. My mother's experience is a compelling example of this. About forty years ago, when my mother graduated bachelor's degree, she had many job opportunities and while at that time the teachers had a well-paid and prestigious job in society, my mother decided to be a teacher.
Secondly, in the past young people who wanted to find a job made more consultations with adults, so they could use their experience about different jobs and made fewer risks. To explain more, nowadays youngsters are more proud and self-confident in comparison with young people in the past. Therefore, they think they know everything very well and do not consult with adolescence in any fields even about the jobs. For instance, according to the previous example, my mother had an uncle who was a teacher before that time. He adviced my mother to choose teaching as her future job to be prosperous in the future. If my mother had not consulted with her uncle, she would have not recognized teaching as a flourishing job.
In conclusion, I believe that people in the past could identify a thriving and secure job more easily. This is because there were fewer job descriptions and jobs needed less profession and on the other hand in the past young persons consulted more with those who had experienced various kinds of job.(33 min.)
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 125, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
... needed fewer services and all jobs did more easier, so people encountered fewer options to...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to teach'.
Suggestion: to teach
...at time. He adviced my mother to choose teaching as her future job to be prosperous in t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71980676329 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5898631375 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48309178744 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8452668623 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.555555556 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203399739141 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745760676473 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404961811734 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142101265693 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207255139845 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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