TPO-49 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends.
Friendship has been always an important concept in any individual's life and the most significant parameters in feeling someone's life with happiness. In this regard, this is a question that whether the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people for a long time or the ability to make lots of new friends easily is more effective in someone's happiness. Personally, I believe that maintaining old friendships has paramount importance in being happy in life. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, anyone can find a few numbers of people in the whole world, that are completely matched with them, and can act as their close friends. To explain more, the ability to make few friends and preserve the friendship in this sophisticated world is an important capability that people need to have. To be more specific, fewer friends can help any individual to spend more time with each other and can deepen their relationship. In other words, the fewer friends someone has, the profound connection they have. As a result, these friends are more connected, so they can help each other in problems, and this results in strong happiness. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I have just a few friends, maybe 8 or 10. But they are real friends of mine, and whenever I had problems they were ready to solve that. If I had not made these close friendships with real few friends, I would not have felt happiness in my life.
Secondly, a long term friendship with someone means they spend much time with each other and experience lots of long-lasting happiness. To explain more, friendship is a kind of relationship that will be more precious, when it continues for a long time. In this case, friends have had a lot of opportunities to be together, and experience many different situations with each other, which may lead to happiness. Otherwise, this relation will not continue in long term. For instance, I have a 20-years-old friendship, who is my close friend from when I was in primary school. In these last 20 years, we had many new experiences with each other, from going to luxury cafeterias, cinemas, to studying together for the exams, and all of these experiences were full of laugh and pleasure.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that having the ability to make fewer but constant and durable friendships can feel someone with happiness. This is because not only they can find some friends that are very close to them but also they can spend a long time with them and rely on them that is the most significant factor of happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...been always an important concept in any individuals life and the most significant parameter...
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Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'someones'' or 'someone's'?
Suggestion: someones'; someone's
... most significant parameters in feeling someones life with happiness. In this regard, th...
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Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people for a long time or the ability t...
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Line 2, column 308, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nt capability that people need to have. To be more specific, fewer friends can hel...
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Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...tunities to be together, and experience many different situations with each other, which may l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7731277533 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7369354854 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458149779736 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4679029878 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.19047619 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.619047619 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315950089207 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102631264405 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878319371884 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216778064027 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720384962267 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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