TPO 45- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Having a successful life has ever been a concern in any individual's life and this has a mutual relation with making serious decisions successfully. In this regard, some people believe that young persons were more dependent on their parents in the past to make decisions in comparison with today's young people. Personally, I agree with this group. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, today's youth are more educated, so they have high levels of awareness, and this guides them to make significant decisions independently. To be more specific, nowadays, parents are more concerned about their children's education. Therefore, they give all their attempts to pave the education path for the kids and equipped them with all required success materials in life, so young age people know all the advantages and disadvantages of various decisions. Consequently, today's youngsters are knowledgeable enough to be eligible for making decisions for their own lives. My friend’s experience is a compelling example of this. Many years ago, when her mother decided to start her own business, she had not adequate information on what to do. But after some years, when my friend decided to start her own business, since, she had learned the basics of new start-ups in the university, she did all the required procedures by herself. If my friend had not been educated efficiently, she would not have been prosperous in her business.
Secondly, in the current world, due to the advent of the internet and the improvement of technology, youth have more social awareness compared to their parents, so they can make serious decisions for their lives independently. To explain more, in this novel digital world, where we live in, it is not important how much you are far from other peoples, the social media can easily break the distance. Any young people can be aware of other one's problems in life and their solution to that. Therefore, today's young people are more experienced in comparison with their parents because they can easily exchange ideas with anyone in other places of the world, and this matter makes them qualified to make effective decisions in life. For instance, when my father faced a challenge in his childhood, there were a few friends around him to speak with them and consult about solutions. But now I effortlessly, surf the internet about my problem and there is a huge amount of information that I can use to solve my problem and decide what to do for that. If the internet is not simply accessible, I can not be well informed about various matters and decide independently for my life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that nowadays, young people can make important decisions for their lives more autonomously. This is because on one hand, today's youth are more educated, and they are aware of prosperity's path, and on the other hand, due to the virality of the internet and social media, youngsters have more social awareness and this can help them to be more conscious about their own lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ful life has ever been a concern in any individuals life and this has a mutual relation wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2553.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9476744186 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73529400124 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463178294574 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 808.2 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2713750939 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.571428571 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2380952381 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360509924026 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121191092561 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10906009939 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248441799545 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432603566993 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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