TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
While some proponents believe that today's teachers are not valued by the society as they were appreciated in the past, others repudiate this claim. In my point of view, the value of teachers is not decreased. I feel this way for two reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, a country improves gradually not over a night and the success of a country depends upon its investments for citizens. There is a widespread agreement among countries that education plays a substantial role in the success of a country. In other words, countries try to boost their education system by investing in many sectors including improving the quality of schools, universities, and increasing the income of teachers and professors. The attention of government toward teachers by raising the salary of teachers not only improves teacher's motivation and creativity but also enhance their social status in the society. Furthermore, the high attention of governments towards the salary of teachers has encouraged adults in order to be a teacher. Only when the governments and society pay attention to the demands of teachers, there would be more qualified teachers in the society. As a result, because of the awareness of governments and countries today's teachers are more appreciated.
The second reason why I have this point of view is due to the fact that nowadays parents are much more involved in their children's education. The growth of technology and high standards of living that is accomplished by technology advancements lead parents to take part in their kid's decisions about their academic life. To put it another way, the increased involvement of parents and their communication with teachers has boosted the role of the teachers in the society because parents always are in search of new ways to encourage their children to study well and this purpose is achieved by finding valuable teachers. Moreover, because of the variety of majors, interests, and a large number of educators the competition among teachers has been increased to attract more students.
The main conclusion that can be drawn from the mentioned arguments is that teachers are still respectful because of several reasons including the improvement of technology, the involvement of parents in the education process of students, and the great attention of governments towards education, to name but a few.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 681, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...f the variety of majors, interests, and a large number of educators the competition among teacher...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, still, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23575129534 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93435956433 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507772020725 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.3879781508 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.733333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144640959005 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571992132358 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454888781559 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986984793045 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629510809656 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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