TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
The advent of technology has influenced the human's life in many sectors including communication, education and way of living, to name but a few. In my point of view, children today allocate most of their time on social media, cell phones and games; thus, they face difficulties in learning process. I feel this way for two reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, no one can deny the appealing feature of cell phones, online games and social media towards children and teenagers. It is conspicuous that children have a penchant to spend more time for using them because not only they are attractive for them but also they are a good entertainment if they are harnessed in an acceptable way. The problem is that children are not mature enough to distinguish their demerits and bad effects on their education and health. Studies have showed that the addiction to cell phones has been introduced as a mental disease among the children. Consequently, when children allocate much time to play games and surf the net their eyes and brain become tired. In other words, their mind become full of unnecessary information that prevent them from concentrating well on the subjects. In fact, a good study needs an active brain not a tired one.
The second reason why I feel this way is that there are a lot of unemployed and uneducated people in the social networking web sites who mislead the children. To put it another way, children are much more vulnerable to misleading ideas and movements. When they spend more time on social media they become influenced and sometimes they lose their purpose. As a result, the importance of studying and education is decreased in their view and they find unnecessary alternatives.
Another perspective which I want to look at it as well is that among all the mentioned demerits of cell phones it is worth to say that these devices can be used in a beneficial way to encourage children to study better. It is to me that parents should manage the schedule of children and prevent them from allocating too much time on social media and cell phones.
The main conclusion that can be drawn from the mentioned arguments is that social media, games and cell phones have decreased the children's ability to learn and study better by reducing their energy and concentration because of the time that is allocated to these tasks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...advent of technology has influenced the humans life in many sectors including communic...
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Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...hus, they face difficulties in learning process. I feel this way for two reasons which ...
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Line 2, column 320, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an acceptable way" with adverb for "acceptable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ood entertainment if they are harnessed in an acceptable way. The problem is that children are not m...
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Line 4, column 162, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a beneficial way" with adverb for "beneficial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...h to say that these devices can be used in a beneficial way to encourage children to study better. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, second, so, thus, well, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86519607843 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68343626895 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495098039216 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2316132939 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.764705882 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23809858788 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789706703376 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504418684905 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141565122165 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352480234161 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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