Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Education is a fundamental key for every one and a key to the success of a country. There is a widespread agreement among countries that investing on education have valuable merits including economic growth, increasing the average literacy and a possibility to render a brighter future for the society, to name but a few. In my point of view, it is better for countries to spend money on the education of very young children. I feel this way for two reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, in the early stages of children's' social and personal development, they are much more flexible toward what they are taught. To put it another way, when students are five to ten years old are in a best condition to learn essential rudiments. Creating valuable and amazing programs in schools need a large amount of money in order to alter school to an attractive place for children. When the schools become an interesting place for children their ability to understand well improves. Thus, they become more creative, sociable and genius. The basic information the children learns in the early years of their life could benefit them in various ways when they grow up. Take, for instance, the students that are educated in the best schools can accelerate their peers whom are educated in poor-quality schools in many sectors including become productive and well-behavior individuals.
The second reason why I feel this way is due to finding the abilities and interests of children to promote them to follow their interests. When the schools are properly founded ones, the teachers and employees are able to recognize the children's' abilities. As a result, the students can be lead in a beneficial way to achieve their goals. The more money is devoted to the schools the more the quality of schools would be increased. The high standards of schools is an effective motivation for students to become more interested in school which is always mentioned as a second home for students.
The main conclusion that can be drawn from the all mentioned arguments is that the investment on very young children's' education is an effective way to increase the motivation and the ability of students to learn better and help them to find their talents in order to be guided in a superior way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...udents are five to ten years old are in a best condition to learn essential rudim...
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Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a beneficial way" with adverb for "beneficial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
.... As a result, the students can be lead in a beneficial way to achieve their goals. The more money ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...oned as a second home for students. The main conclusion that can be drawn from ...
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Line 7, column 213, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...on and the ability of students to learn better and help them to find their talents in ...
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Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...ability of students to learn better and help them to find their talents in order to be guided in ...
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Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a superior way" with adverb for "superior"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ind their talents in order to be guided in a superior way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91794871795 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74309125594 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489743589744 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9169836149 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.823529412 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245848034374 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859661663715 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710250989292 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151138894293 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783265625796 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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