Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Being successful in a career depends on many factors such as high knowledge, experience, self-confidence, social development and etc. In my point of view, the crucial factor that has the most influence on success in a future job is studying hard in school. The reasons for the following idea are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, studying hard in school is an effective way to be well-informed and have a sufficient knowledge. The knowledge that is derived by studying is more valuable because the most important factor that help someone to be successful in her or his job is the ability to handle and find a solution to problems. studying hard in school extend our perspective; as a result we can focus better on finding new and proper solutions for the problems and being creative; therefore, being creative and problem solving can promote individuals to be more confident and have a success in their jobs.
Secondly, people who are hard worker and industrious in schools become more responsible and industrious at work. In other words, studying hard in schools is a beneficial way to develop personality and prepare for the future job. When a student tries hard in the school the personality of the student is evolved as well and leads to do her or his best to achieve goals and become prosperous; for example, many factories and industries hire people with a strong CV because they know that highly educated people will be more useful in their projects.
Finally, the ability to relate well to people is important too. Moreover, people at work meet many people so their social behavior and the way of treating with others affect their job. To put it another way, good relationship between coworkers and high potential to team works lead the company to be more successful
To sum up, I strongly believe that studying hard in school is more important than to relate well to people in the job atmosphere. Studying hard in school enable people to be more creative and hard working in the future jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ce, self-confidence, social development and etc. In my point of view, the crucial factor...
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Line 2, column 83, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'sufficient knowledge'.
Suggestion: sufficient knowledge
...ective way to be well-informed and have a sufficient knowledge. The knowledge that is derived by study...
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Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Studying
...handle and find a solution to problems. studying hard in school extend our perspective; ...
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Line 2, column 557, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ote individuals to be more confident and have a success in their jobs. Secondly,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, such as, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88081395349 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76472745276 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494186046512 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.462618207 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.153846154 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374465923701 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154597679455 0.076458572812 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632552854446 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228056039838 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069627860763 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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