TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Spending time with children have pivotal role in create of children's personality. Because parents are first guidance for kids. Some believe that parents playing game or sports when they are busy, while other believe that doing children's homework together. In my view, homework is optimum selective. I fell this way and explore in the following essay.

First, kids be responsible about their duties. Parents can like a teacher and more and more enthusiastic the children. Take my self as an compelling example, when I was kid and I went to elementry school, after school always my parents worked with me and after a while I felt that I could by myself did my homework completely because my basic strenghtened with help of my parents. In contrast, one of my friend that parents did not help her in other level of school had problem and weakness. This example truly demonstrate the role of parents in cooperation to kids.

Second, children feel that they are guidance in spite of their teacher. Children can use the help of parents whenever they want. Because the education of kids is very important and essential for parents. Doing homework with parents not only interesting for parents but also exciting for kids. Moreover, if parents feel the children do not realize something completely , they explain that more and more until get that. In contrast, if parents take some time for children in playing game do not added positive aspect to children but addict them to computer game from childhood.

In conclusion, I vehemently assert that doing schoolwork is the best use of time for parents because children not only be responsible but also they feel have guidance in their life.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in my view, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96819787986 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58056075125 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501766784452 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.4518351215 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7058823529 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6470588235 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295398138239 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940791593382 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979707217692 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215559060079 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.091912169482 0.0645574589148 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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