TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things related to schoolwork.
devoting time to children is one the momentous tasks that each parents should plan. Nowadays, success of new generations becomes harder but parents could facilitate this arduous trail for their children by means of reliable planning. I believe that busy parents should devote their free time to their children's schoolworks rather than allowing them to play games or sports. I will substantiate my point of view in the following paragraphs.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate this opinion is that children always have time for doing recreational activities and parents must utilize their scant time for more valuable purposes such as education. I'm going to share one of my personal experiences with you. my nephew is in elementary school and he always plays different games even if his mother or his father is doing a personal affair. As a result, it is not reasonable that parents continue that game with their children.
The second reason behind my standpoint is rooted in the fact that mother or father or even both of them could improve educational capacity of their offspring by having an important role in their children's school related matters. On the other hand, children will perceive that the quality of their instruction is a substantial subject for their family because they devote their priceless time for settling school problem. For example, when I had been a student in preliminary school, I always had a great concern that my mother will be resent me if I earn bad grades because she always probed my grades and my progress precisely.
In brief, I should aver that devoting time to our children's schoolworks is more beneficial than playing games with them because not only they always have time for playing but also they perceive that their educational future is a great matter for the family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, in brief, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5973049518 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534426229508 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3356717269 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.083333333 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269092352497 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111525443414 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829305234141 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184717538953 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516264134132 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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