TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing
Nowadays, parents besides their other tasks, such as their jobs try their best to foster their children in the excellent fashion. Because parents have not a great deal of free time to spend with their children, many people believe that it is better for them to use their free time to have fun playing games or sports with their kids. While others hold the opinion that it is more beneficial to spend their time to solve their kids educational problems. I prefer the first perspective, and the reasons to support my viewpoint is elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, having a fun time such as playing various kinds of games is beneficial for both the parents' and the children health. To be more specific, not only kids but also parents spend most of their time in order to complete their tasks. In this case, kids assign numerous homework and parents have a plenty tasks that they must do for their jobs. It is no secret to any one that allocating parts of their time for playing together not only strengthen their family bonds but also help them to be far from their daily concerns. Therefore, children and parents are able to relieve their stress and tension by playing a games. Furthermore, it is needless to say playing other sports is very beneficial for their physical health.
Moreover, it is better for parents to allow their kids to do their schoolwork independently since they can learn better. To put it in other words, if kids try to find solution to their challenges in their course, they must allocate more time and energy to get involve. As a result, they will be familiar with various aspects of their problems, and they will fortify their knowledge background. On the other hand, if parents say the solutions of their problems or how to solve them, they will be dependent to others. An example can shed some lights to this issue. When I was in primary school, my mother helped me after her works with solving my mathematical problems. I imagined I am very talented in this course, but when in my final exam my performance was not excellent. Had my mom not helped me, I would have spent a great deal of time to find a solution for my problems.
In conclusion, I strongly prefer parents spend their free time with their children for fun matters rather than their schoolwork. This is very helpful for kids because not only is it more favorable for their health, but also it is very useful for their education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Nowadays, parents besides their other tasks, such as their...
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...laying games or sports with their kids. While others hold the opinion that it is more...
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...ted upon in the following paragraphs. To begin with, having a fun time such as...
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...t do for their jobs. It is no secret to any one that allocating parts of their time for...
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Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a game' or simply 'games'?
Suggestion: a game; games
...eve their stress and tension by playing a games. Furthermore, it is needless to say pla...
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...y beneficial for their physical health. Moreover, it is better for parents ...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...work independently since they can learn better. To put it in other words, if kids try ...
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...olve. As a result, they will be familiar with various aspects of their problems, ...
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... with various aspects of their problems, and they will fortify their knowledge ba...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65668202765 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4359416056 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460829493088 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7572755621 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.05 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340065276722 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116563073279 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947303286429 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238746926931 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900286321955 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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