TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

There has been much discussion of the topic weather perents should have more fun and play games with a child or it’s better to do things related to the schoolwork. In my opinion, parents should spend time with their children during playing some games together or go some sports activies. I will reinforce my opinion by providing some examples.

In the first place, if parents want to be friends to their children they should spend as much free time as they can by enjoying dufferent types of entertainments. In order to see the point clearly, I will give an example from my personal experience. When I was a child during the weekend me and my mother had a tradition to play monopoly game together. Sometimes my father joined us and we were able to play it for the whole day. Now, when I am living in another town I remembered this enjoyable moments with a warmness and excitement. In other words, this family tradition has streigtened our family and tighten our relationship. So to say, the quality time spended together means a lot to every memder of our family.

Secondly, I believe that during the games parents can better understand and communcate with a child more productively rather then in the process of doing a homework. The statement can be supported by some statistics I have seen recently. There was made a research by one journal, which compared parent-child relationship development in different Russian families. Interestingly, there was indicated that the most closest relationship had this members of a family which shared the same interest with a child. In the light of above, I ween that gatherings of people, such as games or sports, makes closer not only friends but also family members.

Finally, it is crucial for children to get acquainted with the rules of the social interactions. I consider that the best way to acqueir this type of knowledge in during the game or collective sports. I suppose that it is equally important to develope the child in the educational and in the social levels. Frankly speaking, I think that parents who are going somewhere on public with their children are ablo to show them an example of an approptiate demeanor.

To recapitulate, I eager to say that no matter how busy parents are, every parents are able to spend productive and pleasent time with a child, and it is all depends on the the parents intentions.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...e with a child more productively rather then in the process of doing a homework. The...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...cs I have seen recently. There was made a research by one journal, which compared parent-c...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'closest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: closest
...restingly, there was indicated that the most closest relationship had this members of a fami...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the closest'.
Suggestion: most the closest
...restingly, there was indicated that the most closest relationship had this members of a fami...
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Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... that the most closest relationship had this members of a family which shared the sa...
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Line 9, column 170, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... with a child, and it is all depends on the the parents intentions.
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Line 9, column 170, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... with a child, and it is all depends on the the parents intentions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, frankly, if, second, secondly, so, then, i suppose, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83618581907 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79282895864 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545232273839 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.591631557 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.45 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286497088521 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728643594581 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627239418179 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153313633359 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506238037769 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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