Without a shadow of the doubt, parents play a pivotal role in the development of their kid. It is a provocative question whether parents spend the time to play with children or they should help in the school work. In my opinion, parents should involve young ones in physical activities like sports or games. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, with the advent of technology, students spend most of the time with their gadgets like laptop and computer. Because teaching methods have been changed drastically from the last time. So, parents should play their favourite sport with them and even they should motivate their kids to do some healthy activity. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My son is nine years old and he is studying in elementary school, after school, in the evening, we usually go to the ground and play soccer together. During this time, he feels a very energetic, comfortable and discusses all the activities he does in the school. I find a strengthening bond between us and I try to teach him some important lessons like teamwork and how to relate to others during this session. In this way, we can teach our kids some valuable social etiquettes in the playground.
Secondly, school work becomes very hectic in the modern world, many subjects are introduced in school. After school, youngsters become tired and feel burdensome, and if parents also start asking about their school work, might be they try to ignore you. On the other hand, when you play fun games, they believe in you and even discuss their problems related to study. Furthermore, as I mentioned in the above paragraph, changing techniques of education, in that way, parents cannot help their kids in a better way. Because their traditional methods of educating are obsolete in modern society. I believe mentors do their job more efficiently because they are up to date in their profession. Moreover, after playing they feel more freshen and it enhances their intellectual and motor skills and they learn the methods of problem-solving techniques.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that playing with kids make them more happy and closer to you, and you can teach them social lessons during playing fun games.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94025974026 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62210847579 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548051948052 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1327400015 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212622280762 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651683139077 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568948736236 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128776479246 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310256914154 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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