TPO 44 Independent Writing TaskSome people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing thi

Personally, I think using the leisure time to play with children would be a better choice for parents. I feel this way for several reasons and will explore these in the following paragraphs.

On one hand, parents may not be enough proficient to accomplish the homework with their kids. Because some parents may not be familiar with topics taught in the school, they will find it frustrating and difficult to solve the problems, especially when children need to rely on them. Not to mention the negative impression parents may make on their own children when children find out that parents are not able to finish schoolwork, either.

On the other hand, the child-parent connection should be carefully taken care of. Once a child links her parents to all hard homework, tedious calcuation formulas, and serious atmosphere, she will feel reluctant to keep connection with her parents. The relationship between kids and parents may be broken. Obviously, it is not a situation what all parents expect. In addition, parents may be too strict when they try to teach their kids.

One more important point is that having fun with parents makes a child feel like her parents can be as interesting and reliable as her friends. In many young kids' opinions, friends are more important than parents. Even they will gradually understand that parents are the strongest shield of them, they spend most of the most critical time with their friends when they develop their personality. So it is neccesary for children to have a nice contact with their parents.

In conclusion, when a child can have a good time with her parents, even the duration is not that long, she will feel calm and relaxed. Moreover, since she can have a deep and positive connection to her parents, every time when she encounters some problems or difficult situations, she will be willing to talk to the parents and get advices form them. This way is not only a safer choice for the kid but also a relieving circumstance for the parents.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87976539589 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60918305029 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50146627566 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6596825502 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8823529412 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199988768212 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716973038841 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535208937736 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122825024467 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334164470849 0.0645574589148 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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