TPO 44
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critical for parents how to spend their time with their children. I admit that there are many opinions about this; however, I think that the best use of time is to have fun playing games or sports. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, playing games or sports helps parents to build good relationships with their children. These days, many parents cannot spend their time with their children because they have to work hard to earn enough money to bring their children up. As a result, children tend to feel lonely and stressed. If the parents use their spare time to play with their children, children can feel more comfortable and believe their parents. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was an elementary school student, my parents were so busy that they come home late at night every day. I felt quite lonely and stressed. However, my father often took me to play soccer on weekends. By playing with him, I could manage my stress and lower my loneliness. If my father did not spend time with me on weekends, I would not cope with the situation, and I could not believe my parents.
Next, there are a lot of subjects that parents cannot teach their children these days. Students nowadays have to learn many subjects that their parents were not taught at school, such as programming. Even if parents have time to spend with their children, it is hard for parents to do together. For example, one of my friends, Ken, has a daughter who is an elementary school student. In her school, all students are required to take a programming course. When she has a problem with her homework, she often asks Ken how to solve the problem. However, Ken cannot answer the question because he did not have opportunities to learn to program. This example shows that many parents have difficulties teaching their children even though they have enough time to spend with their children.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that parents should spend time with their children playing games or sports. This is because it helps children cope with their stress and loneliness, and parents cannot be the best teacher of the subjects taught at school nowadays.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74293059126 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42554489129 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452442159383 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5758156839 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2173913043 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9130434783 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21739130435 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392632668762 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122916238868 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115300380972 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27002098756 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274495408739 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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