TPO 45
There is lots of important decisions that young people should take in their life, to determine their future career, life style or selection of their spouse. In past mostly parents decided for youngsters, however these days youngsters have become mostly independant, and started to make their own decisions. In my view the new generation of young people better on making decisions than the prevoius generation. Following I will explore reasons of my belief.
To begin with, modern youngsters have access to lots of knowledge, which makes them ready for making informed decisions. Nowadays mostly people are educated, and also have access to different media to even learn more. Regarding this, in time of making decisions they can easily refer to the vast amount of knowledge available, and by considering all aspects, make the best decision possible. My own experience demonstrates this reality. For instance, last year I wanted to purchase a house for the first time in my life. To decide about where is the best place for my new house I started googling about different niegberhoods all around the city. At the same time, I just real state websites for prices and other information like price changes in an area and risk probability of an investment in each area. Meanwhile, I also checked facebook for information about people in the nighberhoods and its' general culture. Finally, by comulating all this data, I was able to have the best possible purchase. A few years ago this was not possible, and young people like me had to rely on their parents to help them with their experience, for this kind of decisions. This example clearly shows how young people, despite their limited experience, can make better decisions than their previous generations.
Secondly, compared to the past, children have grown to be more aware about their surroundings, and this greatly assists them in making wise decisions. When you look around you see that children these days are bombarded with different kinds of information, on a great variety of topics. While growing up, all this exposure to knowledge makes them wiser than any other past generations. This new generation are young, but have experienced more than most elders. For instance, lets consider junior university students. In an study in Tehran university it is shown than more than 80 percent of university entrees in the past 3 years had a very detailed information about their selected major, and also university. They all had selected their study path, and its' leading career path, with wide open eyes. The same study at the year 2000 showed that only 35 percent of university entrees of year 2000 new what exactly their selected major was about. All this shows that today make more informed decisions.
In summary, I think young people today make better decisions than in the past. Youngsters today have access to lots of knowledge that can be used for making a wise decision. On the other hand, they grow up by being exposed to lots of knowledge, and consequently, grow to be more informed than previous generations of young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'There are lots'?
Suggestion: There are lots
There is lots of important decisions that young peopl...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I will explore reasons of my belief. To begin with, modern youngsters have ac...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...consider junior university students. In an study in Tehran university it is shown ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i think, in summary, kind of, in my view, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2581.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01165048544 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6306373022 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485436893204 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.596782698 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5925925926 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0740740741 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.96296296296 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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