tpo 45
Recently, life has changed in many different ways. Years ago, young people did not make any decision on their own, they had to get others' opinion. However, today's society is entirely different from the previous era. Therefore, I wholeheartedly believe that children nowadays like to make their own life decisions for several conspicuous reasons.
One of the reasons why children do not depend on their parents to make a decision is because there are many resources that they can refer to before they take any serious decision. For example, let's say there is a laday who to choose a school to study at. She does not know which school should joint. Thus, she searches online about the ranking of the school in her country, and also she looks for the school aminites. At the end, she chose the school that has the best ranking and excellent facilities after she read many comments for other students who attended the same school. If this young women did not have access to this information online, she would probably ask her parents to advise her. Although some think that not all the information that be written on the internt are true, most of them are actuall people's opnions. Because of this, children rudece their dependent on their parents when it comes to a live decision.
Another reason makes young people to depend on themselves to make their own lives decisions is that their parents teach them to so. Research has been done on 1500 sinior students of Seattle School district about who helped them to choose for their future career. 70% of the participants stated that they did it by themseleves because they learned from their parents do so. Although some think that it is not beneficial to let young age people to make critical decisions becasue they do not have enough experiences in life, children should learn how to think and eveluate mertis and demirts of every decision. If parents had not had teached their youngs to make decisions, these youngsters would have suffered in their live when they become older and if their parents are not their for them. therefore, children should learn who to make decision alone.
To sum up, young people today are less depend on their parents on many things in their lives such as decision making. This is because they not only have internet access but also their parents teach them to be self-dependent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
Recently, life has changed in many different ways. Years ago, young people did not m...
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Line 5, column 792, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...f their parents are not their for them. therefore, children should learn who to make deci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83004926108 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35518086266 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487684729064 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2669158255 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.05 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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