tpo-45 : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Based on the valuable investigation of researchers, today children make better decisions than young people who lived in the past also they are more independent. In my view this point for some significant factors is true. In the following essay, I will explain to them.
Firstly, in the past times, people had no authority to make a decision for themselves, so they were completely depended on their parents. It comes to my mind that my grandmother told me, since she did not have any liberty, could not able to decide properly, most of the time, even for her unimportant decisions such as clothes shopping, she depended on her parents. Meanwhile, today even the children, bellows the six years old do not let their parents decide instead of them to buy something for them.
Also, in this improvement society, people's mind is involved with other things such as the costs of renting homes, electricity and etc. In conclusion, they have no time to pay attention to their children. One of the most results of this neglect is that Individuals take more distance from their parents and become more independents and alone. They have to carry out all their responsibility lonely and just wait for its consequences, good or bad. These valuable experiments give them the power of facing problems and make better decisions. For example, when I was seven years old, I had to make ready lunch for my self because my mother was a teacher and never back sooner at 4 PM. During these cooks, I learned that I never both pour sugar into the rice and meat and touch the hot-pot. Now, I grow up older easily can make a decision about what I have to cook for lunch and how.
According to what has mentioned above, I agree with this statement that today young people make a better decision than people who lived in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68867924528 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5681410174 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591194968553 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1258805389 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367622863113 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112954829679 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953983857554 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252522530835 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676527170091 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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