TPO-45 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There have been some moot points regarding the best way which universities can invest. The question of whether it is more important to fund in infrastructures and buildings or keep the faculties satisfied has aroused as a subject of controversy among academicians. When it comes to my position, by weighing up the pros and the cons, I strongly subscribe to the point that funding on faculties satisfaction is more significant than other activities. I have some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that faculties have a pivotal role in students. The more satisfied faculties, the more enhanced knowledge. Therefore, open-minded professors can focus only on student learning and fortify them in an accurate direction. As a case to the point, I vividly when I was a bachelor student. I studied at a university which had an eyeful building because authorities in that university invested only on buildings and infrastructures. Although we had a beautiful building, we had not any well-educated and satisfied professors in the civil engineering field. Thus, they could not impart knowledge very well to students. This issue leads to I decided to get an admission from another university. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that professors contention is very significant for improving universities grade.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that due to the economic situation and recession, people struggle with many difficulties. In this way, professors at universities overwhelmed and inundated with various stresses and tensions. As a consequence, universities authorities should alleviate these difficulties by investing to satisfied their faculties. My personal example demonstrates this reality, two days ago I watched a program on the BBC channel, in that program, some scholars conducted an experiment about the relation between professor satisfaction and their research. They evaluated two groups of faculties, one group with contentment and another group without satisfaction. The result showed that the group which has not contentment about their workplace published less research on well-known articles. My Personal example shed some light on the point that consent is a very important factor which ameliorates professors' abilities.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that, contentment and satisfaction is a very momentous factor for people in their workplace. Faculties are not exceptional, hence, universities should provide priority for investing any money to satisfies professors. This action not only helps them to alleviate their stress and tension but also ameliorate their research.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...best way which universities can invest. The question of whether it is more important to fund in infrast...
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Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'faculties'' or 'faculty's'?
Suggestion: faculties'; faculty's
... subscribe to the point that funding on faculties satisfaction is more significant than o...
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Line 2, column 795, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...petently corroborates to the point that professors contention is very significant for impr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58865248227 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27021542346 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54609929078 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7981800254 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.782608696 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3913043478 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65217391304 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0803695717361 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0231714474025 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326749174101 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0578742621784 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547165296023 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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