TPO 46
The reading and the listening passage have conflicting opinions about whether it is good to use electronic medical record systems or not. The author believes that using electronic databases has several advantages. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article and bring up three reasons to reject it. she thinks using this approach is very uncertain.
The first point the author makes that is electronic records can help reduce costs. It is mentioned by this there is no need to use paper for copying, faxing, transporting and also saving therefore, it costs much less than using traditional method. However, the lecturer opposes this point by explaining that most doctor will not throw out the paper record and will still keep it as backup. It is mentioned that by using electronic record there still be storage cost.
Secondly, the author contends that, electronic records can reduce of medical errors because they are associated with standardization of forms and legible fonts. The lecturer rebuts this argument. she notes that most doctors still use pen and take notes by hand. she says that their staff will create an electronic records later from the notes consequently, there will still be mistakes.
Finally, The author states that large amounts of data which is gathered by electronic medical records can help medical research. The article established that database can provide easy way for search. The concept is refused by the lecturer which asserts that there are some law which restrict access and use database. she put forwards the idea that medical records are private and some patients block using their record for many people.
In conclusion, the lecturer and the author appear to be in disagreement about whether using electronic medical records are beneficial. the author contends that they are three benefits for it which is contradicted by the lecturer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ronic databases has several advantages. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...using this approach is very uncertain. The first point the author makes that is el...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lso saving therefore, it costs much less than using traditional method. However, ...
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Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...nts. The lecturer rebuts this argument. she notes that most doctors still use pen a...
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Line 4, column 262, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...s still use pen and take notes by hand. she says that their staff will create an el...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...which restrict access and use database. she put forwards the idea that medical reco...
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Line 6, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ctronic medical records are beneficial. the author contends that they are three ben...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16938110749 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53975175866 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517915309446 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7919157116 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1666666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0555555556 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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