TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

By and large, it is established that the celebrities always have had a great influence on their fan's lives. Are these fans mostly adults or youngsters I believe they mostly consist of young people. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into my most prominent reasons for this viewpoint.
To begin with, celebrities are some successful people, who have become successful sometimes despite their hard life issues and conditions. Success and prosperous is something we are all in demand in our own lives. The way to get to our own fulfillment is diverse from one to another although there are sometimes some same situations but, the whole thing is different. Adults have found and figured out their way in life and know how their lives or their attitudes work so it is less likely that they look for a sample in celebrities but youngsters are the ones who are looking for others to learn from their experiences. Thus, this lack of experience in life is the brightest reason why are they so into some celebrities. They look for someone who has been gone throw all the way they are planning to go and since celebrities are the ones with an open life they are the chosen samples. I say this upon my own experience throw my younger sister she follows lots of celebrities in her social media and their fan pages and it is vivid that she worships them like a god because of the conviction she has that they are the ones who get have everything in they want in their lives. I in the other hand believe the success is something inside people and had I wanted to have a sample for my life it would have been google, amazoon and facebook companies CEOs rather than some celebrities.
Another thing that worth saying a word about it here is that youngsters always have a tendency to like what there friends like or follow what most of the people follow in their age and celebrities have always been a number one high school news and talking topic. Furthermore, they sometimes have this tendency not discretionary, I mean imagine a high school girl who wants to have some friends for having a proper conversation with others she must at least have something in common and that thing might be an interest they can share about a famous people. In addition to this, with technology's manifestation teenagers are the ones that take lots of advantages throw the web pages and social media and so on. In social media online users are a big crowd which follows or like posts together, they move parallel and simultaneously. By that I mean they are kind of like a long chain which celebrities and other renowned individuals pull toward themselves and the more they fascinate and attract the more and more will come to that side. So it can be concluded that the feelings of a teenager are something that can be dau, it sometimes based on a group decision that has been made.
Extrapolating from the aforementioned it is obvious why celebrities have become this important to some people mostly youngsters these days. To put in briefly we all have a sense of exploring and seeking things based upon our interest but as the generation moves forward these interests are genuinely and progressively changing. Consequently, we should adapt our selves to the young generation's penchants and attachments.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, another thing, at least, i mean, in addition, in brief, kind of, by and large, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 573.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72251308901 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67868807949 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448516579407 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 860.4 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4569597559 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.3 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.65 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.65 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111470678216 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038313132473 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305397266395 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671752723429 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281823033027 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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