TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In this 21st century, the whole world gets advanced with the assistance of science and technology and people are getting benefited many ways in their lives. Although many people believe that it is unimportant to know about the events happening around them but in my view, it has become paramount to know about the things that going on our surrounding. I hold this opinion for two reasons that I will explore in the following paragraphs.
In the beginning, knowing about information from events helps us to communicate with other people in our society effectively. Apparently, it seems that all information has no crucial role in our life but in some ways, it paves the ways to get closer to our colleagues, relatives or surrounding people by fruitful communication; helps them in their need. My own experience is a compelling example in this case. Last week, in my country another political party called a strike in the whole country; I knew this news from breaking news in a TV channel in my house, after some while one of the colleagues was saying me that he would like to go Dhaka city for Eid shopping tomorrow and confirm two air tickets at that time. As I was informed about the strike I said to him about it. He felt astonished as he didn’t know that but it made me happy that my consciousness about surrounding helps other people and it creates easy way to communicate with other people.
In addition to that, it is incontrovertible that gaining knowledge from different sources enlightened one’s personality or personal development because knowledge is the power. It is very easy to distinguish between the people enriched knowledge with a one who has no or little knowledge about surrounding. An example can illustrate it clearly; my sister is a pharmacist who has a great thrust of knowledge and she keeps touch with a variety of topics as possible. My sister always keeps her eyes on different events around the world, she knows lots of things like traditional culture, food items, songs, the geography of most of the country. Vast information changes her personality from us as a way when she talks she can provide argument and example suitable for that but due to lacking information we can’t convince her with our point.
Once and for all, absorbing knowledge that has no direct effects on our daily lives can helps us in other ways, it does not waste our time, waste our money. Information is a powerful tool to me that can cause any significant work in lives at any time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 720, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d confirm two air tickets at that time. As I was informed about the strike I said ...
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Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e enriched knowledge with a one who has no or little knowledge about surrounding. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, if, so, while, in addition, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80831408776 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80517099546 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515011547344 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.2116669908 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.125 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0625 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4375 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118323930974 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454333341339 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447889140879 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0774530173864 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527614555234 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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