Some sociologists believe that most events that are occurring throughout the world are completely or partially correlated. Therefore having information about the impressive events gives us the chance to make our best decisions. Two controversial questions that arise in this regard are how people can distinguish between important and unimportant events and to what extent people should be aware of the events in order to take the best action.
Some people argue that people have to be aware of the outline of each event that is occurring in the world. They support their belief by mentioning the correlation between the events. They contend that one event in one area of the world can directly or indirectly affect people's lives in another area. Thus, people have to read about events to be able to prepare themselves for the best reaction to the changes. For example, the increase in demand of rice in Thailand may increase the price of rice in Iran. Since Iran is the only exporters of rice in the middle-east, and other countries cannot satisfy their own demand they have to import rice from Iran. Therefore, when the demand of rice increases in Thailand, the shortage may occur which contributes to the increase in the price of rice in Iran. In this condition, Iranian people have to buy rice at a higher price. However, if they know the changing trend, they can predict the increase in price and purchase rice with sooner and with a lower price.
On the other hand, today, people are more concerned about different issues throughout their lifetime and thus they have less free time to spend on unimportant issues. In other words, people have more important to do to be able to afford a good life and in this regard, time is considered as one of the precious properties of humans in today's world. For example, today, most people above the age of 18have to work besides their parents. Even, many university students have to do part-time jobs in order to pay their tuition fees. In this condition, they have lower leisure time that they can spend on reading about the events around the world, and most of them prefer to spend their free time on playing games, hanging out with friends and so forth since they are more appealing to them.
In addition, with the advance of technology, people are able to gain information on specific events occurring around the world in an easy way. In fact, using computers and the internet have enabled people to concentrate on their interests in a relatively short time. Therefore, it seems unreasonable to read about the events occurring around the world before they affect people's lives. For example, we can search for a specific term in google and gain relevant data in a few seconds.
To put the issue into perspective, I strongly assert that it is unnecessary to read about the events around the world. Not only we can read about these events after selecting the most important ones, but also we would waste our precious time by reading about these events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Consider replacing "in an easy way" with adverb for "easy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...urring around the world in an easy way. In fact, using computers and the internet ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in fact, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 102.0 52.1666666667 196% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2496.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82785299807 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48198730676 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452611218569 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2896779762 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.52173913 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4782608696 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86956521739 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180388206723 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607844778701 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495757979316 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113634632961 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139499235812 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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