Nowadays, people are exposed to various sources of news such as TV, internet and newspapers. While people find news related to them such as politics, government regulations and sporting events as useful, they are unmindful of events happening on the other side of the world. Nevertheless, some people insist that it is essential to acknowledge information about global events , regardless of the impact it has on your life. However, I strongly disagree with this idea. Firstly, it is almost impossible to be aware of everything, and also it is time consuming. Moreover, some news may contain inappropriate or biased information.
First of all, through the "flood" of information, trying to acknowledge every event happening around the earth is impossible and also time consuming. Through the fast-paced modern society, events around the world are updated endlessly, and people even find it overwhelming to search important information, and people find it pointless to care about minor incidents that would not effect them seriously. As an example, my dream is to become a major league sportscaster, and in order to do so, I try to keep myself up to date to various sports events and news. However, I find this work very time consuming and exhausting. Every time I look up at minor news, even incidents happening in countries that I have never heard of, I find there is not profit doing so. If people try to care on every single happening around the world, as a result they could get stressed doing so.
Also, some information might be manipulated or confronting. Through this harsh world, many shocking accidents happen, and people who are unrelated may not be wanting to receive those news. For example, I once saw news about the war between Israel and Palestine and a picture of the terrible massacre going on. Not only the cruel picture of children getting killed by soldiers made me sick, I had many Jewish friends from Israel who had contrasting views with me. As a result, the confronting news affected my relationship with my friends although the event had nothing to do with us. Also, some information might contain biased views or have fake information. The media which delivers news on events around the world may have misleading information and can be easily contain biased views according to the writer. As an example, I once say a news on a university research team that confirmed the health effects of salaries. However, right after I received news on how salaries could be damaging to your health. The media continuously supplies us with various news, but it is important to select useful and genuine news.
Compared to the past, it has became much easier to receive news around the world. However, as the quantity of news has greatly increased, it is important to select useful information as it may be confronting or pointless.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nowledge information about global events , regardless of the impact it has on your...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...re about minor incidents that would not effect them seriously. As an example, my dream...
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Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...n, and people who are unrelated may not be wanting to receive those news. For example, I o...
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Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'those newses'?
Suggestion: this news; those newses
...unrelated may not be wanting to receive those news. For example, I once saw news about the...
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Line 5, column 840, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...o the writer. As an example, I once say a news on a university research team that conf...
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Line 7, column 30, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
... news. Compared to the past, it has became much easier to receive news around the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, for example, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00628930818 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83782890197 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5399702337 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54166666667 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176425513337 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517728332859 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460259051535 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11188713027 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344142159433 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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