When we come to the discussion about what students of grade eleven should do in summer, it seems hard to come to a consensus. Those who hold the idea that students should get ready of the major courses they would like to study in college often neglect the fact that summer vacation is an excellent opportunity to relax and refresh. Indeed, I, as a contemporary student, am in favor of the opinion that students should be led by the teacher to visit museums or historical sites and then write paper because students could improve their knowledge of history and also make friends with others.
To begin with, visiting museums or historical sites is of vital importance for students of grade eleven to know more about history, contributing to their comprehensive development. A quintessential example would be myself. When I was in grade eleven, my tutor guided me to the Forbidden City in the summer, which is a fantastic museum in China. From this tour, I acquired much more knowledge about Dynasty Qing after I finished a paper on this, which played an important role in the development of China. Recently, a friend of mine comes from America to China for exchange and accidently, he asks me for something about Dynasty Qing. I am so appreciated that I went to the Forbidden City when I was in grade eleven, from which I could tell him a lot about this period. How excited I am! If I had not gone to the Forbidden City, I would not have talked a lot about this.
To boot, visiting museums or historical sites could also help students make friends with others. During the trip, students of grade eleven could communicate more and get acquainted with each other. Among those cases, myself is a typical example. Besides knowing more about the history of Dynasty Qing, I also made friend with Mary. During that trip, I talked a lot with Mary because both of us liked to listen to the music of Jay Chou. Excited and fortunately, we discussed about his concerts and pieces of music and became best friend from then on. Until now, we still keep in contact every day. Were it not for this trip, I could not have known her. Only through this way can we have the chance to be acquainted with more people.
Admittedly, people may contend that it is crucial to get ready for the major courses in summer. Nevertheless, we cannot deny that comprehensive development is more significant for students. At the same time, students can also improve their history level, which is also a major part of college courses.
To sum up, we can safely come to the conclusion that visiting museums or historical sites and then writing a paper is a better choice for 16-17 year old students because they can improve history knowledge and also make friends with others.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69979296066 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54157631856 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472049689441 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4122350616 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6956521739 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65217391304 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0843753298736 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.028566198356 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0266481446171 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0555894264709 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164487715299 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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