TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

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TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Human is a social species who need to communicate with their peers. our friends are made the most important part of our social life. There is a couple of different strategy about choosing and keeping friendship for long term; some people tend to keep their friendship firm as they get older and make that more close and old base, while others prefer to find new friends and they enjoy make new communication environment. personally, I believe that old friends should be kept for whole our life and this strategy has several advantages which will be discuses more in details below.

First and foremost, finding a good friend is not easy at all. it worths if you find a good friend who match with your criteria, try to keep your contact closer and more persistent. based on our personalities and our conditions, we have a lot of different factors to determine the best friend character. this may take a long time to find a good case for friendship. when we choose someone to have close relationship, we enter to private zone of each other and will know many things. these acquaintances will be a good way to help each other to improve our social personality. For example, my father and his friend who they have been friend for more than 30 years, have a lot of these kinds of example that they have encountered in this long term.

secondly, as we grow up our flexibility ability to change our behavior decline and our personalities get its shape. it is not easy to make a new good friendship as earlier. As a child, finding a new friend that we spend sometime with her takes a minute, but for an adult it may need longer time and more suitable condition. I remember when I was a boy in elementary school every week, we had new close friend which may wouldn't take so long. As we grow up in the high school it was more difficult and we were more rigid to be open to new person. During the time our friend ship get stronger and we understand our personality better. these communications shaped our friendship and in this reciprocate behavior we changed consciously or unconsciously our personality to match better. it took a lot time and many efforts and this is a huge investment. we should be careful about our wealthy investment and keep them safe.

To make short a long story, I believe that old friends are so much important and we should keep them carefully. they are our long investment and they took a lot of time and energy to were build. keeping old friendship well is easier and more beneficial than making new friend which it needs this enormous effort.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63913043478 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62152281176 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469565217391 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1033336752 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7826086957 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91304347826 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203311748921 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680966228935 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459205465336 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145540565047 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159465564492 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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