Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, computer technology is an integral advancement in contemporary life which we cannot imagine this convenient life without computers. While some countries may have problems to meet their citizens' essential needs, the rest of the world, I believe should spend more budget to develop the computer technologies. I feel this way for a few reasons, which I aptly subestantiate in what follows.
First, computer technolgy brings a unique opportunity to human by dividing resources equally between people. Thanks to the computer and the Internet advancement, folks have a wonderful access to much data and information which before the computer era have been in access for only a small number of people. If we accept that data is the most important element which affect humans life, we should support this idea that government must spend more money to improve poeple access and usage of computer and the Intenet. As an example, nowadays many students from all cross of the world can learn from the remote classes provided by the high rank universities such as Ivy league Universities.For example, my nephew has used some of these courses through the Corsers website, which offers people to use academic lectures which prepared by thsoe colleges' professor for free. If students wanted to get this courses' credentials, should pay a small fee. It is an stounishing chance for many students in many countries.
Second, computer technology introduces many job opportunities in developing countries, and this is changing millions of peoples' life. Computer and the Internet technology disapeared distances between countries in various aspects. Many of developing countries were so poor before invention of computer, but now they progress sharply. India as an emerging power in the world, is a powerful country related to its development in the computer technology. Many of computer experts are Indian people who they produce many jobs and wealth for their people. I read an article that computer technology and next generation inventions such as smart phone and smart gadgets are in the main stram of improvement of underdevelopment and developing countries.
In conclusion, considering all aforemnetioned detailes, I strongly believe that computer technology besides the Internet has brought an equallity in the new world with increasing people's access to data and information and producing more job opportunities in developing countries. I think that govenment inevitably will fond more on the computer technology in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40253164557 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99270704638 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551898734177 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.8923841979 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.529411765 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249498226478 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783360503433 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04796568569 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155377535063 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199265413189 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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