TPO-5 independent essay
In life, enjoyment is very important to make ourselves happy. Today there are many options available for enjoyment like to watch the movie, go for vacation, eat in the restaurant. I sure some people would believe that today people spend more time on personal enjoyment rather than doing things they should do, others would disagree. In my view, I firmly believe that people are doing things they should do for many reasons.
To begin with, people are busy with their carrier. Young people are working hard to set in their lives. They are working long hours, they do overtime to get a better position in the company. For example, my brother started to work as a computer engineer as soon as he finished his graduation. Sometimes he works at the weekend to make his job finish, he stays late to finish the tight deadline of the project. Hardly, he gets time for enjoyment as he is busy to set his carrier. My grandfather also tells him that in his time they don't work like him, he says that they use to spend some time for enjoyment. He also mentions that today's life is so hectic that they won't get time for their enjoyment. This example taught me that today people are doing things which they suppose to do.
Furthermore, people have to take care of their families. Both parents are working to pay bills. Life is so hectic to take care of kids with work. For instance, my husband and I work fulltime and we have a young child to take care of. Even though we both work fulltime we spend some time with kids. We play with her, teach her colors, numbers and take her to the park, museum to make her active. Before in my country, India women didn't work so she mostly takes care of the children so dad only has to concentrate on work. So responsibility would be divided and they had time for enjoyment. But today both parents have to work and take care of children. In this hectic life, people don't get enough time for their enjoyment as they busy with their families. This example taught me that today people are doing things which they should do.
In sum, though some won't agree, people are engaged with their lives. Not only, they are busy to set their carrier, also they have a responsibility to take care of the family. I strongly believe that people are doing things which they suppose to do rather than spend time for personal enjoyment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Hardly' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...nish the tight deadline of the project. Hardly, he gets time for enjoyment as he is bu...
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Line 5, column 532, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...er also tells him that in his time they dont work like him, he says that they use to...
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Line 5, column 570, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...y dont work like him, he says that they use to spend some time for enjoyment. He al...
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Line 5, column 630, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...me for enjoyment. He also mentions that todays life is so hectic that they wont get ti...
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Line 9, column 235, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... we have a young child to take care of. Even though we both work fulltime we spend some tim...
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Line 9, column 430, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...tive. Before in my country, India women didnt work so she mostly takes care of the ch...
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Line 9, column 681, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...f children. In this hectic life, people dont get enough time for their enjoyment as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, as to, for example, for instance, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54117647059 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22618080327 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416470588235 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.0928794634 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.4814814815 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7407407407 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.37037037037 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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