TPO-5 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
The issue of whether people today spend too much time on their favorite activities rather than doing the tasks they should do aroused much controversy among people with different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked would agree with this statement while others have a negative attitude toward this idea. As I am concerned, I completely agree with the first group’s opinion. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the argument to support my view.
The first reason to be mentioned is that nowadays, people are completely busy with their work and study. Therefore, they have not too much spare time to spend on their personal enjoyments. In this competitive world, you would not have any choice unless dedicate most of your time to work better and harder to protect your steady job. Companies usually do not hire people for the entire life, they monitor the employee’s task and if the workers do not their duties on time, they easily fire them. Hence, this competition takes a lot of time because you have to try to be a winner of this rivalry.
In approaching this issue, apart from the points stated before, another reason that deserves some words is that today’s world suffers from the economic crisis. Many countries have many economic problems that influence people’s life. People should have two or three jobs to ensure they can provide their children necessities. Sometimes, children also take a part-time job to make money and could pay some of their expenses like the tuition fee, cloth and stuff like that. The economic crisis is serious in third world countries like mine. For instance, in my country parents work up to 10 hours to provide even the basic needs of their family. Children as young as four years old have been forcing to work in street to sell some consumer goods to make a little money. Therefore, they have not time to do their favorite things, they are working to be alive.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments above, I am of the opinion, people nowadays have not enough time to do whatever they want, and the competitive world and crisis economic make them do the things they should do.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, so, therefore, third, while, apart from, for instance, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86133333333 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51594877178 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549333333333 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4462102346 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.277777778 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36808516652 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109091129838 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13279510662 0.0737576698707 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273109799745 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102758933996 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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