Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Job is one of the essential needs of human. People need a job in order to gain money for the cost of life like food, accommodation, clothes and so on. When it comes to this point that people should take the secure job right away they find it or should wait for a more satisfying job, definitely, some people would agree to choose a secure job and others select waiting for a satisfying job. As I am concerned, I completely agree with the second group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments for supporting my views.
The first reason is that more satisfying job help us to protect our job at any expense. When you are interested in what you do a job every day, surely, you would try to stay at work in any condition. To illustrate that ideas let’s consider the following example. I remember, about ten years ago, there was unbelievable inflation in my country. Many factories and companies had to abandon their work, my family was worry about my father’s factory. He was working in textile industry, with increasing inflation, he confronted with the serious problem but in contrast of others, he did not give up and due to the keen interest to his work tried to find some solutions to keep at during hard condition.
As a second noteworthy reason about waiting for a more satisfying job is that eagerness for your job would help you to get promotion in your workplace. For instance, in a big company, there are some employees that choose their work just because they want to have a secure job and other employees select their job because they interest in their work. When the company suggests to its employees to work on a competitor plan, a number of supervisors will monitor their work. Those who are an eager passion for their work, absolutely, will more successful than other group and because of hard-working, company give them promotion and totally try to save these workers in their company even when they compelled to fire some of the employees due to the economic problems.
By the way of conclusion, base on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that the advantages of more satisfying job outweigh over choosing a secure job. With waiting for a satisfying job, you can benefit from job security in a hard time like inflation and also because of hard working that consequence of your interesting in a job, you will get a promotion. That’s why everyone has to select his job according to his enthusiasm for his work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ompany even when they compelled to fire some of the employees due to the economic problems....
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rding to his enthusiasm for his work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, as to, for instance, in contrast, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68577981651 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69276897551 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488532110092 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.7925372715 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2222222222 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354752172101 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114616052313 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107310147495 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233775776792 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917307572725 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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