Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of whether sports and social activities should receive the same amount of budget as the classes and libraries aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked would agree with the statement that university should consider the importance of sports and social activities for students and devote the same financial support, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I completely in agreement with the former group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that student’s health as young people who are supposed to make the future of society is a very significant issue. Students usually spend up to 7 hours at school and most of this time they sit on the chair to listen to their teacher. As a result of this sedentary lifestyle, many young people in school-age are obese. As you know, scientist proved there is a correlation between obesity and chronic diseases such as cardiovascular diseases, diabetes, and blood pressure. Therefore, it is really necessary that the university provides a condition that more students encouraged to do exercise because of this important reason. By investing money to renovate old facilities and establishing a new gym and swimming pool, without any doubt more students participate in these kinds of activities.
In approaching this issue, apart from the reason given above, another reason that deserves some words is that only learning academic subject would not help students to be a successful person in the future. They need to learn and improve some important skills to prepare for the real world. By attending social activities, they learn to be more socialize, they learn how to get along with different people with a diverse background. For instance, some students might be shy and attending social club force them to express their opinion and solve this problem by taking part in the discussion. While if these students enter the workplace and could not show their abilities due to their introvert character, they never succeed in this competitive world that everyone wants to show he or she is the best to get a promotion at work. Therefore, the excellent grade would not enough for their future success and university can create the condition to assist students to learn these essential skills.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion university should dedicate the equal financial budget for sports and social activities as classes and libraries because of the importance of student’s health and preparing them for the real world by improving their social skills.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, so, therefore, while, apart from, for instance, such as, you know, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11894273128 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79132514243 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526431718062 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.6187478485 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.705882353 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7058823529 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215694893416 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634546071211 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721193007693 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152316666664 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101521933126 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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