TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As for the growing need for internet resource, in my opinion, it is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access.My reasons are as follow.
To begin with, internet provides much convenience to our daily life. In the past, when few people could get access to internet, it was really difficult a customer to purchase something which was not sold in s/he's city. S/he could only travel far or even give up buying the product because online shopping had not come to the stage. however, today we can order whatever we want from the shopping websites and the products can be delivered directly to our house in a few days. also, it's often cheaper on the internet since selling products online can save much money for the sellers from renting a store. Therefore, internet can provide more convenience to us with more development.
Secondly, internet does require improvement to provide people with better experience. With the ever-growing development of technology, such as vr and 4K videos, people can get access to the virtual reality without stepping outside their homes. however, unfortunately, only a few people can get access to these high-end products because obstacles such as high price and low-transportation speed hinder ordinary people from experiencing these techniques. For example, in China nowadays, we can only experience online vr games in some grand shopping malls or technology companies. If governments spend more money on developing internet, it's positive to expect that we will sooner or later be able to experience the fancy games with comfort at home.
In addition, with improved internet access, the young generation can make more contributions to society in the future. internet is like a warehouse that contains tons of information, covering different categories of knowledge. With better access to the internet, we can also learn the subjects we are interested in freely. In this way, students can easily get better grades for school and become elites to society in the future.
In summary, considering the convenience internet provides, the fantastic experince it conveys, and more knowledge it gives, it's more beneficial for governments to spend money to improve internet access in order to construct a better society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, in summary, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27123287671 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86097456386 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539726027397 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5824146441 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.176470588 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244651316046 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920354171392 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951238199342 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191521724218 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102968078867 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.