TPO 54
Since the dawn of civilization and industrialization the outstanding role of authoritarians’ decisions in every individual’s life has been undeniable. Regarding the importance of the issue, a wide variety of aspects of policies that a government should take have been assessed and discussed by scholars for decades. Accordingly, an undeniable question that always has been the topic of controversy and brought about debates is whether it is better that governments invest in arts or athletics. I adhere to the idea that the former is the more rational option. Inwhat follows, two conspicuous reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
The first remarkable aspect to point out is that encouraging people to participate in regular exercises is of the main advantages of this dedication mote budget to supporting athletics. It is crystal clear that in this hectic life, people are exposed to a lot of stress and pressure which is harmful for health. Willing to gain higher levels of both mental and physical health, there should be controlling factors in people’s lives, therefore, having regular exercise is one of most efficiet activities that as able to prevent people from gettingstressed out. Furtheremore, the more involved in sport teams one is, the more likely they are to practice social skills and intract with different people which acts as another milestone in different parts of one’s life in this soluted lifestyle of current era. The statistics revealed by a conducted research in my country indicate that managers who exercise regularly, for example tree times a week, are about 65 percent able to compensate for probable errors quickly.
Moreover, not only does this policy enable people to be healthier, but it also serves as a contributing factor in maitaining the social unity among people. Indeed, unity is an inavitable parameter for a community in orther to develop and succeed; as a result, governments have to provide people with activities which let them feel more closely and dependent to each other. International competitions such as Olympic matches are capable of arousing peoples’ emotion and sentiment, and accordingly, inspire them to dedicate more time to see a national wide progress. For the matter of illustration, I used to go to a high school which cared fore its volibal team. Every time that our team would win the matches, we felt that we should make more effort to help our friends and school.
In conclusion, I believe that investing in sport-related activities is the far better option based on a myriad of reasons only two of which were discussed above. Consequently, it is highly recommended that policy makers do not neglect the importance of spending money on athletics and supporting sport teams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: conducted research
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'national wide progress'.
Suggestion: national wide progress
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Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27539503386 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12334277506 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591422121896 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6350605778 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.470588235 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0588235294 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.01818996416 127% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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