TPO24
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Growing up is a long process and has major milestones. Most crucial changes occurs when teenager life is getting over, and adult life begins. Teens have to learn many things to adapt to this change and gain new skills to be an adult. Their parents should educate them properly and support them to get the necessary daily life abilities so they can encourage them to take a part-time job for these needs because of some compelling reasons.
First of all, taking a part-time job raise child’s awareness about responsibilities. Young people can learn how to do a task as instructed and see the results of their behaviors or doings if they take a role in a job. Besides that, they could notice their mistakes when doing a job and avoid them for the next time. For example, when I was a teenager, I worked part-time in bicycle repair work. I didn’t pay attention enough, I didn’t repair the bicycle very well once. Unfortunately, my mistake made the bicycle owner had an accident, and I felt terrible. I learned responsibilities with this sadly experience.
Second, children in the new generation do not know the value of money and waste their money and do not care about it all. However, earning money is not easy as they think. To gain money requires time and effort; if children take a part-time job, it can provide them to learn the value of the money they have. For instance, my daughter was spending her money without thinking, but after being employed in a clothes shop, her spending behaviors affected positively, and she began to invest.
Furthermore, working teaches the children how to communicate with people in a correct manner. A part in a job requires meet society. I observed my students at the end of their working experience they had better social skills.
Therefore, I agree that one of the best ways parents can help their children prepare for older life is to encourage them to take part-time work due to the reasons I explained by giving the examples of experiences which beneficial in many aspects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a correct manner" with adverb for "correct"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...children how to communicate with people in a correct manner. A part in a job requires meet society....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79772079772 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67915659297 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569800569801 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8372298023 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6315789474 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403964433313 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103831275775 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108549596082 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226583291809 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114662997194 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.