When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems?
Many students have to move to a new school during their educations and face so often some difficulties. These problems can occur due to school conditions, academic intensity, different cultures, different places et cetera. Regardless of the source, it is a fact that students meet many difficulties, and these problems may affect their education and mental health. Therefore, schools could help new students by designing an environment where students can feel better and creating opportunities to socialize with new friends and adapt to a new system. I will explain these more with some examples below.
First of all, administers of the school should take the adaptation process seriously. If they can design an orientation program for new students, children will feel less strange in the place. For example, when I was 14 years old, my family moved to a new state, I had to go to another high school. I remember the first day in my new school; I felt utterly stranger because I didn't know anywhere other than my classroom. I wanted to explore the gardens, gym, art class, but I was so shy to ask where are they to anyone. I learned them day by day, but I would feel better if there were an orientation program. Besides that learning places is crucial because when your lesson is in another class if you don't know where the classroom is you may become late. Being late is not a good thing, you may lose the opportunity to learn lectures completely.
Secondly, making friends is hard when you come later than the actual students. Socializing is an essential thing at every age but more important when you are children. Children want to make friends, and the school can help them by creating organizations, social events, club activities even parties. If students spend more time with each other, they would have more time to share their thoughts and feelings. That can make the bonds between them stronger. For instance, when my brother had gone to a new school, he saw a school-organized garden party and attended it. He met with many students at this party and made many friends. As a result, he didn't feel alone in the school even he has just come. I found kind of these activities is influential for the students' mental health. They do not get depressed because of loneliness when they made friends.
In conclusion, i think school can help new students to learn environment and place. Moreover, organizing diverse activities encourage their students to socialize and to learn each other more effectively. According to my examples, these solutions are reasonable for both the students and all schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89841986456 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72918592044 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525959367946 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1642691954 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4615384615 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0384615385 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442517787598 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110308364958 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835170342814 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284681098264 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12074034718 0.0645574589148 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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