TPO24- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents have the most responsibility to teach their children how to live in their future life. In fact, they have to prepare their children by applying different ways to make them strong enough to withstand with tough situations in the future. In this regard, I definitely believe that parents should help their teenage children get ready for their life by letting them work in a part-time job.
To begin with, if children work in young ages, they would be economically independent because they gradually start understanding the value of the money they earned. Therefore, they learn how to save their money for the future and controlling their expenses. This is a great experience for them to realize that budget management in the family is not an unimportant matter and it should be respected by all family members. Take my experience for example, when I was in high school, I wasted my pocket money on buying sport cloths but after working in my father's restaurant as a part-time employee, I realized that I was just wasting my dad's money on nothing and if I were on those days, I would not make the same mistake again.
In addition, working in a part-time job makes young people ready to accept bigger responsibilities because they become responsible for their working place and also understand the importance of being on-time and working in groups as well. Therefore, they can be better fit in their future working life as a trained person. For example, my father was encouraged by his parents to work in their farm to get valuable experience of being on-time and responsible for some little things. After a while, they let him control the entire farm because he just was ready for everything.
Paradoxically, most of the young people have to work hard on their lessons to pass their exams because as science grows, lessons are becoming more difficult for students in order to make them ready for some complex concepts of the university subjects. In this regard, if they work part-time, their grades may be affected by their poor performance and it may result in quitting the school or even in some extreme cases they may be expelled from the school. Therefore, although there are some negative consequences of working part-time for teenage children, this can be solved by just working in the summer season due to having the less effect on their school life.
In conclusion, encouraging young people to take a part-time job has lots of benefits outweighing the drawbacks, so parents should motivate their children to do it, because children become financially independent along with being more responsible in their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 594, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
..., this can be solved by just working in the summer season due to having the less effect on their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94356659142 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70769729101 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47855530474 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2525135792 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.0 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5333333333 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24030259992 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10695673974 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071546239015 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176522163033 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761835948718 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.