tpo30
The industrial revolution had a great impact on people`s lives in many aspects containing people`s careers. Before, people used to have individual jobs and usually did not work for another person or company. However, people now are mostly working for companies or factories and thus, they have to come up with a fixed schedule. They are usually two schedules available for people based on the hours they work each day. They can either work five days a week for shorter hours or work only three days a week for long hours. I personally go for the latter schedule since I contend that it is not only more enjoyable, but also more efficient. I am going to elaborate on my opinion in the following paragraphs.
First of all, a three-day job will give one a more flexible program and one will be able to do many extracurricular activities besides his salient job. For instance, one can play some sports, takes a trip and even simply meets with his family in/on his free days and he does not have to worry about his job. It has been proved that people who experience a five-day job are less likely to spend their weekends for entertainment and they tend to just sleep during their vacations instead of some social enjoyable activities. Consequently, their vulnerability to mental diseases such as depression increases greatly.
The second equally important point is that working for three days a week, no matter how many hours one works a day, will give him a sense of freedom and he will not get exhausted of his job any time soon and he will have much greater yield than who works for five days. An experiment was conducted on two groups of workers of the same company, whose difference was the number of days they worked, showed that the ones with less day works(!) a week had much more interest and efficiency compared to the others who worked for five days a week. So the lower the number of days one works, the more efficient he will be.
Last but not the least, working for long hours not only is not a disadvantage but also is a great chance to get focused and productive. It goes without saying that it is better to do a job completely in one try rather than dividing it to many shorter parts. If one wants to do his job in short hours, especially for time-taking jobs, he has to leave his job incomplete until the next day and start it again. It is axiomatic that this procedure will decrease the efficiency by a great amount. In spite of this, one will be able to finish each of his tasks in one day by working for long hours and only quits his job when he makes sure the job is completely done.
To wrap it up, I contend that working for three days a week is far better than working for five days since it makes people not only physically, but also mentally more efficient. I suggest people reconsider their work schedule and make it more convenient by reducing the number of days and increasing the work hours each day. However, the schedule should match the person`s preferences and one can say that he is more comfortable with a five-day schedule.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ss, model of talking with other people, and etc. Some people may hold the view that the ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 436, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...take an opposite point and believe that todays society the young people in each case a...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2746.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96564195298 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85821734551 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517179023508 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 868.5 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.5409313877 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.391304348 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0434782609 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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