TPO48 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TPO48
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is critically important to cope with modern complex life for us. I grant that there are many opinions about that; however, the ability to plan and organize is imperative for young people, in my opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.

First, the ability to plan and organize helps young people get better grades at school. These days young people have to learn a lot of subjects at school. For example, in Japan, students have to learn English conversation and programming at school, and students have to deal with a lot of homework. As a result, young people need to consider their schedules carefully to deal with their assignments efficiently. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a freshman at university, I majored in physics. Although my major was physics, I had to take a computer programming course because this skill was needed for physics research. However, I was not good at programming at that time. To tackle the assignments in the programing class, I looked up the schedule of the teaching assistant and made an appointment. My schedule was so tight that it was difficult to find a vacant time, but I adjusted my schedule carefully. Consequently, I could finish my assignments and, I could get an A in this class.

Second, these kinds of skills are essential to do well in a company. There is no denying that modern life is quite complex. As a result, we have to collaborate with various people to achieve a higher outcome in business. The ability to plan and organize is needed to make progress in a project. For example, I am working for an electronic device manufacturing company as a product planner. These days customers' demand is becoming complex, so we have to collaborate with many people, such as software engineers, hardware engineers, and salespeople, to meet the customers' demands. In this situation, we need to make a schedule carefully to complete our projects by the deadline. If we cannot meet the deadline, we will lose credits from our customers and business chance.

In conclusion, I strongly feel that planning and organizing are imperative skills for young people. This is because it helps young people get better grades at school, and these skills are needed to cope with the issue in professional life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1004, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
... finish my assignments and, I could get an A in this class. Second, these kinds o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, look, second, so, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86649874055 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85429442799 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478589420655 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5298115695 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5416666667 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236582687161 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719508421081 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586187897923 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165475967594 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377186119834 0.0645574589148 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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