These days, there are more options for entertainment than ever. With the development of transportation and the Internet technology, one can go anywhere they like and interact with anyone online. Seeing this, some people express their worries and say people nowadays do too much things that they like rather than things they are supposed to do. In my view, it is a misunderstanding.
Young people, as I know, are faced with great stress from their study or work. Students spend an average of eight hours everyday in classroom. When they go back home, they are swamped with their homework. Staying up late is quite common among students in lower grades,much less high school students and college students. Do they like their quizzes, assignments and projects? Probably not. Can they do what they really like? For most of them, it is quite impossible. Those who have graduated from university are also under pressure. Young employees always complain about working extra hours and having no time to be with family and friends. It is true. To make matters worse, the economy these years is not as good as a decade ago. There are many layoffs in companies. Young people have to keep their nose to the grindstone, just to keep their jobs. They simply have no time or mood for entertainment.
Old people, especially those who have retired do not have so much to do. They have savings and their kids have all grown up and have their own families, so keeping healthy and enjoying their retired life is their highest priority. That requires the elderly to do what they really like. Take my grandpa, he is a big fan of music and he learned to play piano at a young age. However, he had to stop pursuing his music dream after he had grown up because he needed to work hard to support the family. Now he is retired and he never has to worry about money anymore. He has started playing piano again and joined in a band in the community. No doubt he enjoyed his life and that is essential to his overall health. In this case, my grandpa’s hobby, playing music, is what he likes to do as well as what he should do. He, therefore, literally cannot do things that he likes while ignoring things he is supposed to do. The same applies to other elderly people.
From what has been discussed above, it is not hard to draw a conclusion that although there are more ways of entertainment these days, people, young and old, are actually not spending too much time on their personal enjoyments rather than what they should do. Instead, youngsters are overwhelmed by their work and they cannot afford to do their hobbies, while people in age are actually doing what they should do when doing what they like.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... worries and say people nowadays do too much things that they like rather than thing...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , much
...te common among students in lower grades,much less high school students and college s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, really, so, therefore, well, while, as to, no doubt, as well as, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66596638655 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4589589028 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506302521008 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.5062554139 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6451612903 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3548387097 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.74193548387 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375669133908 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095992965355 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129671628144 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284858936284 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0964358167283 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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