Tpo51 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Tpo51- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The influence of television has attracted much social concern. Several experts argue that the negative impact of movies and television on behavior of young people outweighs the positive one. Personally, I strongly disagree with this argument.
On one hand, what has been put under consideration is decent behaviors. It is widely known that young people are likely to have quality time to spend with their family members or their friends while watching movies. Thus, they are capable to have meaningful conversations with others. For this reason, there is a strong likelihood that people strengthen their family bonding or their friendship. Hence, they are bound to be nice with other people. More notably, it cannot be denied that spending time on entertainment is the wonderful chance for young people to be relaxed and reduce stress and strain. Thus, they are capable of regain their interest and inspiration. They, then, are able to have more motivation and be more eager to work and study. Subsequently, it is possible for them to maximize their work and academic efficiency. As a result, they are sure to be filled with happiness. Without doubts, young people are certain to behave more decently. Indeed, watching television and movies is certainly undeniable when it comes to decent behavior.
On the other hand, some might say that movies and television are extremely addicted. Accordingly, young people are certain to have immoral demeanors. However, it is just the surface of the problem. In fact, young people always have their time schedule. For this reason, their time for movies and televisions is symmetrically distributed. As a result, they are capable of not attaching too much to the television. Besides, even is the addiction of young people to televisions is not evitable, this addiction also is considered as the opportunity for them to explore a wide range of topics and fields. Consequently, they are bound to make observation and then reflect on themselves. On that account, it is possible for them to discover their hidden natural potentials. Thus, they are certain to spark more initiatives and ideas. As a consequence, they are likely to feel more confident in their ability. Hence, they are sure to behave in a decent manner. By and large, saying that movies and television cause young people to behave immorally is highly unrealistic.
In a word, decent and moral behaviors are convincing reason for my disagreement. It is highly recommended that experts should take my writing into detailed consideration to guideline an appropriate decision on the influence of television.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a decent manner" with adverb for "decent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ability. Hence, they are sure to behave in a decent manner. By and large, saying that movies and t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...behave immorally is highly unrealistic. In a word, decent and moral behaviors ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, consequently, hence, however, so, then, thus, while, in fact, as a result, by and large, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19477434679 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86638013754 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479809976247 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9793589929 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0333333333 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63333333333 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199614687905 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573841359605 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509885021943 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128874774071 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662160549931 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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