TPo54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, managing a country by governments has paramount importance. In this regard, some people believe that governments should spend more money in support of arts, rather than athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Personally, I disagree with this group. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, spending money on athletic events lead to a healthier society. To explain more, by supporting Olympic teams, governments can encourage people of society to do more sports, from primary to advanced ones. On the other hand, these events make youngsters energetic and provide them lots of fun and happiness, so youth can relieve their pressure, stress, and anxiety. Therefore, financing athletic events, not only increases young people's physical health but also their mental and psychological health. Eventually, supporting sports teams, governments have a healthier society, which is the most significant factor in the success of a society. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was 20 years old, our national football team was accepted to play in the international football club due to financial supports by the governments and hard attempts of themselves, so I and all of my friends were very delighted because of that, and played a lot of football games. On the other hand, after our classes, we were going to the gym to do more exercise and made ourselves ready for tomorrow's play. If governments had not supported the team, we would not have done many football playing.
Secondly, supporting athletics by governments leads to economic benefits. To clarify my point, managing a significant sports team, the team owners can make a lot of money by advertisements on the athletes' shirt or even around the playing field. On the other hand, If the team becomes popular, and achieve success in various sport events, lots of investments will be offered to them, which can increase their properties and finally lead to a more rich society, from people to the governments. For instance, in my last example, a lot of companies navigated with the national team in order to advertise on the players' shirts, and that made a huge amount of money for the team and the manufacturers of sport's equipment. If governments had not supported the team, they would not have made this amount of money.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that financial supports on athletics by the government is beneficial. This is because they not only can achieve a healthier society but also acquire economic benefits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1018957346 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88405370502 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514218009479 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7936321274 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.65 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299599467004 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994065187783 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887295599527 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191666150937 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632712192856 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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