TPO54: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Although these days, different sports have loads of popularity among people, I believe that various fields of arts need more money to improve and the government should prepare this support for them based on some reasons that I will illustrate them in the following paragraphs.
First of all, I feel that artists have more financial difficulties rather than athletes. Most professional athletes receive a lot of money and salary from their teams, while artists are somehow individual businesses. Their income is so limited, even if they were very talented. Besides, they need a lot of equipment and staff -that are usually expensive- to gain their income. So they need to be supported. Another financial problem of artists is in the domain of sponsorship, as it has mentioned in the question. I knew a group of photographers that were looking for a sponsor for months. The process of finding a private sponsor took a long time. If a governmental institute had helped them, they would throw their exhibition sooner, when they needed the money.
Secondly, the great fame of athletes is explicit to everyone, while artists are mostly unknown. I feel, if the government helps them with money, they can show their arts more and get a reputation. For example, the government can help them to rent or buy a gallery in a famous place so people can become more familiar with artists and their works.
Third, I think it can be a significant incentive for the young, that wish to become artists to pursue their passions. In my country, there are a lot of talented people that wanted to be artists. But they do not receive any financial aid from the government, so they have to leave art and look for another job to afford the expenses of life. Meanwhile, there are a lot of sports clubs that are dependent on the government, and they receive an immense amount of money from the government.
To sum up, in my conviction, the government must spend money in support of artists, and its importance is more noticeable for me due to the reasons that I explained.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, while, for example, i feel, i think, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81073446328 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69522466807 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536723163842 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6615386627 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6111111111 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153521790619 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450014243668 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565799357478 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108830729388 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628071094824 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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