TPO 56: Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Nowadays, with the emerging of new technologies like brand-new cellphones or high-speed internet connection, sharing what is happening in our life became more common in communities. Despite some people enjoy from keeping their pictures and other evidence of their life on the web, I am of the conviction that this would be a better idea if I do not share my personal information on these media. I feel this way due to a couple of reasons that I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, I think it can bother our followers and everyone that visit our social media since everybody does not like to see our experiences constantly so, after a while, it makes them exhausted. I should admit that this opinion is influenced by y personal experiences where I follow some of my friends on social media, and they post every single event in their life on this platform. Hence, every time I check my phone, I have to see them and leave a comment, because they are my close friend that expect me to be involved in what happens in their life. As a result, it is disgusting now for me.
Secondly, I believe it can turn into a habit gradually for showing off, because when someone shares her\his experience continuously on the network, s\he uses to it after a while, and what happens when everyone wants to show her\his personal life to the people is a competition, that will start between them to show off by his\her travels, parties, and so on. For instance, this already happened on Instagram, one of the most popular internet-based media. On Instagram, a huge mass of people is trying to say that we have the most privileged and affluence lifestyle.
To sum up, in my opinion, I prefer to keep my adventures and stuff like that in private for myself. This is because I do not want to be annoying and I want to prevent getting a harmful habit.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, i think, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61329305136 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69988558474 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564954682779 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.7504729948 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.25 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140934874414 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475995300551 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563686416079 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860798849278 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336716565439 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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