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Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Advancing technology have been significant role in people's life. It comes as no surprise that efforts to finding the effects of technology on children have been always among the top priorities. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether technology makes children less creative than past or not. I, to a great extent, I disagree with this statement and believe that technology makes them more creative. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated by the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point that makes me hold this belief is that technology is advancing really fast. This improvement brings many tools and equipment that for people that they need to know how to use. So people must excavate and decipher them. Since children are more curious about objects, they spend much time with the tool to decipher how to use it. Perhaps a more specific example can shed more light on the matter. I have a brother named Ali. In the first days that cellphone came to our home, he spent four to five hours to find how to unlock it and play with it. If he did not have such condition, he may not learn using other technologies as well. Also, His creativity helped him to solve his problem in his further life.
Another reason deserving some words here is that advancing technology have brought unpredictable problems for human beings. When children encounter unforeseen situations, they need to be creative to render a solution for the problem. In the past, people live evenly. They merely faced surprising condition that they never saw before, therefore, they live calm and in peace. But, today's world is a hustle and bustle world which situations change every second. Consequently, it is important for people to prepare themselves for this predicaments. So, not only do parents teach their children how to be creative in critical situation, but also they oblige to practice it in different situation in their daily life.
Finally, yet importantly, nowadays there are many games that insist on improving children's creativity and through these games children learn how to be creative. In the past, children play outside their homes with their neighbors, but today, children play with various video games that are designed professionally. Every game is designed for improving an ability of children. In my childhood, I had a game. In that game, I must build a bridge which did not fall when a truck go over it. I built the bridge in several ways until one way had a result. That game teach me creativity which is a momentous ability in today's world in my life and I can exert it in many situation. Had I not had this game in my childhood, I would not have had creativity in this form.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned paragraphs, one can soon realize that technology has made children more creative than past since not only do they encounter many new tools that they need be creative to learn how to use, but also they face unpredictable situations and many games exist that improve creativity of children in the young ages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to use'.
Suggestion: to use
...t have such condition, he may not learn using other technologies as well. Also, His c...
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Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nt for people to prepare themselves for this predicaments. So, not only do parents t...
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Line 7, column 658, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun situation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many situations'.
Suggestion: many situations
... world in my life and I can exert it in many situation. Had I not had this game in my childhoo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91047619048 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6984836592 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510476190476 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.7110170367 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9333333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254579001616 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569010542037 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805530079315 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161550357295 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909191767533 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.