TPO26
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs. Agree or disagree?
By and large, it is established beyond any doubt that choosing appropriate profession plays a prominent role in people's success. It comes as no surprise that efforts to finding the importance of similarity of parents and their children's job have been always among the top priorities. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is that whether it is better for children to have careers similar to their parents or they choose different jobs. It is commonly accepted that it is far better for children to choose careers similar to their parents since parents can help and guide them. While there are still those who argue that choosing different job from their parents is much better for them because they can be knowledgeable in different areas and experience various careers. I, to a great extent concur with the former idea. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated by the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point that makes me hold this belief is that parents can give a hand to children in the beginning of their work by helping and guiding them. It goes without saying that starting of a job is the most difficult step in proceeding a career; so, it is really important for people to start it appropriately. When parents are familiar with the procedures, they can show the right and wrong ways of the work. In such circumstance, the children can go forward with an open mind and without doing irrecoverable mistakes.
Another reason deserving some words here is that choosing similar jobs can help children to remove some redundant expenses. Without any shadows of doubt, when children continue their parents' work, they have a good deal of equipment, places and many tools for the job. They do not need to spend extra money on something that exist; therefore, they can save the money and pay it for another stuffs like advertising which is the most part of a career, and it can be caused the success of the career. Perhaps a more specific experience can shed more light on the matter. My father was a lawyer and had an office. My brother decided to continue my father's career. He used my father's office at first and many tools left over from the time that my father worked; so, he can save money and spend it in another rooms like increasing the advertising.
Finally, yet importantly, continuing the similar jobs like parents’ career helps children to have better communications. If children keep their parents’ way, they can use parents' credit and fame and make worthy connections with other companies and managers; thus, they flourish faster than others starting a business by themselves. As Steve Jobs, a renowned entrepreneur and chief of Apple Incorporation once said, the rule of business is this sentence: "the more connection, the more prosper". This provides further legitimacy and support for the fact that children earning connections through their parents' work and fame can improve easily.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned paragraphs, one can soon realize that it is better for children to continue their parents work since not only can parents help them, but also children can remove some extra expenses and use their parents' credit for having successful connections. It is highly recommended that parents try their best to give a hand to their children for having prosperous children and as a result, successful society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to appropriate'
Suggestion: to appropriate
...ablished beyond any doubt that choosing appropriate profession plays a prominent role in pe...
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Line 9, column 167, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
...e their parents work since not only can parents help them, but also children can remove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, as a result, by and large, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2873.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 569.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04920913884 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76299430462 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500878734622 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 863.1 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2780641459 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.708333333 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7083333333 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403542502452 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12110942626 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106506030772 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250244242363 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113252910888 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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