The university has money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the quality of the technology that it provides for students. Or it can redesign spaces where students hold club meetings and gather with the friends in their spare time to make these areas more comfortable and appealing. Which idea do you prefer and why?
In this modernized world where we live, with a galloping rate of advancement in technology, universities which are repudiated to be the cornerstone of all societies are in search of different ways to make their academic institution a better one. Keep this in mind, some of the pedagogical experts believe that it is better to provide some natural sources in the space of the campus, while others hold a different view and assert that spending money on the technological facilities is of the vital importance. I am, to a great extent, hold the belief of the latter group. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some conspicuous aspects of my viewpoint.
First and foremost, needless to say, all educational tasks can be done by using computers and related devices which makes it necessary to accommodate such monumental prerequisites for the students. To be more specific, all the students have an urgent depend on computers for searching their projects, analyzing the collective data, writing the papers, sending emails, watching learning videos and to say but a few. If these kinds of conveniences are not sufficiently available in the universities, students will become unsatisfied and unsuccessful in their education. Subsequently, they will not choose that university for their future studies. To clarify, let's have an example. I have studied at a high-ranked university in my country but that university did not asset high-speed and high-quality computers. As I remember, all the time we had difficulty connecting to the internet which led to postponing our research and made us disappointed. Had university had high-level amenities, We would have chosen it for our PhD studies.
Another reason alongside the first reason elaborated above is that by having developed technological devices, the university will become well-known and be located as a high-ranked university in the list of university ranking. As a matter of fact, universities are rated based on many criteria such as the quality of services presented to the students. All students consider this ranking and make a priorities list for selecting a specific college. It can be said, one of the most significant aspects which makes students more interested and willing into a particular university is its technological means. Therefore, furnishing such substantial equipment assists the university appeal to more students and achieve reputation among other competitive colleges.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons elaborated above, equipped with technological facilities not only does help students to perform their tasks properly but also make the university more famous than other rival educational organization in the world which leads to taking more students in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 266, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as a matter of fact, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38620689655 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16540622014 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542528735632 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0914668592 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.166666667 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218361189079 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623735994959 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433774757549 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124581943745 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384059865053 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 58.1214874552 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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