Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? More and more people are spending money on their pets unnecessarily when the money could be spent on something better.
Since the dawn of civilization, by the galloping rate of the wealth of some social categories of the society, a great number of these people have been searching for various sources into which they can invest money even unnecessarily things. A prevalent debate undergoing question is whether nowadays, people spend more and more money on their unimportant pets while they can make use of them in a more monumental matter. I am to the great extent, of the belief that certainly, prosperous people should invest their money on very more important things as there are more fundamental issues for spending money like adopting a child and assisting charities.
It is crystal clear that human per se is gregarious who wants to get a sense of self-satisfaction by taking care of other beings like pets. As a matter of fact, some wealthy people provide the circumstances for nurturing animals in order to become happier and decrease their depression. While there are other better ways for experiencing such a feeling such as adopting a child and growing him up. In this way, they definitely contribute to the more prominent work which is the best works and nothing can be replaced it. According to the psychological experts' point of view people who take the responsibility of nurturing a child feel happier than who take care of the pets. As a result, taking care of a child could be a better way of spending money as it helps to feel happier as well.
One of the other ways for spending money which occurs in my mind is providing a budget for various charities. To put in general words, by the increasing rate of poverty, more and more people suffer from the inability to satisfy their essential needs such as clothes, foods, and shelters. Having mere subsistence, they really need to get support. Therefore, if some groups of people had additional money so much that they can spend on their pets, they will be able to give a hand to charities instead. Under these circumstances, they collaborate with the society in the way of raising the welfare level of the society. In the long run, such a great collaboration will lead to a flourishing society.
To wrap it up, if some clusters in the society have much money so much so that they can spend on their pets, it will be much more beneficial to give a hand to the charities or adopting a child instead of paying on unimportant issues which ultimately do not have any practical influence on the whole community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, therefore, well, while, in general, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74299065421 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76048015333 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488317757009 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.3095849368 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.875 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293036344834 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957354204325 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851828659745 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18635210607 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724699954219 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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