A high school that normally give students about two months of time off from school during the summer is introducing a new educational requirenment for students in eleventh grade (16-17) over the summer, students have the following two option to fulfill the new requironment.
-They can attend classes each day for several weeks to complete a university level course on a subject that they are considering selecting as their major feild of study at university.
-They can spend several weeks traveling to museums and historic places in their area with a group of students guided by a teacher and then write a paper of their experiences.
It goes without saying that education is the cornerstone of all societies all over the world, especially in more developed countries. No one can afford its vital role slightly. By keeping this in mind, people ̓s attitude toward implementing various techniques for educating students are widely varied person to person. A prevalent topic undergoing question, a controversial one, is whether students learn more by taking class courses or via traveling and at the end, writing a paper. I am to a great extent, of the belief that when educational lessons combine with field practice, the outcome will be more beneficial. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will substantiate in the following essay.
To commence, It is crystal clear that nowadays learning methods are really different from the past. Today educational system is in the search of unique paths leading students directly to their future success. One of the most influential ways is mixing study plus practice. In other words, when students can be able to see what they learned previously, they will get a more comprehensive picture. In these circumstances, not only do they learn more but also they get more pleasure leading to enjoy more while studying. Reading a magazine about educational matters, I saw the results of new research revealing the more utilizing practice in the course of study, the better understanding of lessons and more grade in the exam. having a better concept of lessons and enjoying more are the most monumental of this kind of method.
secondly, in this way, students will get familiar with the methods of writing a paper. As a matter of fact, all students should know how to write an essay as by having information on this skill they will become more powerful than of the other students who do not have. While taking courses in the class only help them to increase their verbal skills, taking them to the museum and ask for writing paper assist them to raise their analytic skills. As a result, they will learn how to organize their finding, evidence, and critics into a cohesive article. My personal experience is the most exemplified of this subject. I learned more and more when we were required to give a report on what we had learned.
All in all, according to the above reasons, it seems the best way of educating students is combining learning with the field investigation causing students to get a more comprehensive knowledge of what they see and by the same token, get information of how to organize materials into an essay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Having
... of lessons and more grade in the exam. having a better concept of lessons and enjoyin...
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Suggestion: Secondly
...ost monumental of this kind of method. secondly, in this way, students will get familia...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, kind of, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, by the same token, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8909512761 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71798232731 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529002320186 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3182696822 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.4 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140872809676 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449687479158 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400904439404 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0966813365677 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165329139921 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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