Your friend has opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study). Which one of the following two majors do you think is better choice? And why?
-a major that allows him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner
-a major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
No one can cast a debate on the significance of education in providing people with a vast variety of numbers of career opportunities. It seems that in the progressive world we are living, finding a job turns into a critical juncture in every one ̓s life in order to get a mere subsistence. So the less the length of education is, the more jobs opportunity will be found. Some people believe that it would be better to study a major with short years but reach a job sooner, but others believe it is more beneficial to study long-term major with more occupation offers in the future. Although people ̓s attitude varies from person to person, I think study short length major and reaching job earlier is better.
Needless to say in our episode the competition for employment is remarkably high. As a matter of fact, by the galloping rate of population growth and the sequent increasing application for education, the whole numbers of available jobs decreases. Under these circumstances, all people are in search of paths carrying them more quickly than their rival. Therefore, it can be said shortening the length of education would be the solution. In this way, people can initiate their job sooner than others. It means they are enabled to create their life and try to make it more successful and special. So by entering to market as soon as possible, they would have a large advantage in contrast to another job seeker.
Alongside the first reason elaborated above another point that needs meticulous attention is that by finding a job sooner, people can start focusing on the other important aspects of life. In other words, education is really time and cost-consuming which if it ends sooner, other important events will happen. In fact, there are several point juncture in every human ̓s life such as finding the first job, getting married, bringing up baby, and to say but a few. By considering this cue in the mind, it is evident that after finding a job, one of the most overwhelming situations for all people, the person can put his effort on the other faces of life which are of vital importance.
To recapitulate reasons, it can be said by shortening the length of the educational process one can find a decent job sooner than his rival and by the same token he is able to focus on the other sides of the life which has equal importance and will help him to create a successful life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...is really time and cost-consuming which if it ends sooner, other important events ...
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'junctures'?
Suggestion: junctures
...appen. In fact, there are several point juncture in every human ̓s life such as finding ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, so, therefore, i think, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, in contrast to, in other words, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70308788599 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65828305853 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50593824228 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8888685955 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.470588235 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133789557662 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406281789853 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585275548562 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828659102083 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792372426753 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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