You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy?
It goes without saying that in our modernized- hectic world where we live, almost all people hardly do work in order to have a better life. Having a vast variety of options, they will be going to be confused that which one reach them to their goals sooner. A prevalent question undergoing debate is that it is better to buy a house or establish a business? Personally, if I had enough money, I would invest money in the business, not a house. I feel this way for two main reasons.
The first compelling reason occurs in my mind is that business is much more a house. Establishing business definitely causes to a hoard of money which people can make use of them for purchasing other things like a big house, a luxurious car, lots of beautiful staffs and so forth. Therefore, it seems that having own business ensure a person of his future, in other words, it is remarkably a big investment. To clarify take an example. One of my intimate friends initiated her business with a small factory. Although she was thrilled initially and was not hopeful about her future investment, nowadays she is one of the prosperous persons I have ever known. Simply stated, more money that can be spent through different fields is one of the most considerable consequences of putting money on the creation of business.
Alongside the first reason elaborated above another reason needs meticulous attention is that establishing own business not only do reach a person to the wealth but also brings about the whole society toward a flourishing state. As a matter of fact, having a glimpse look at more developed countries reveals that the more individual inception industrial organization, the more flourishing society. Under these circumstances, factory leaders decrease the unemployment rate of society by hiring lots of workforces. As I remember when one of the largest company in my city started its work and simultaneously employed a great number of workers, the welfare-level of our city raise since the workers were included a large number of the population who were being able to satisfy the essential needs of their own family.
To wrap it up, investing money on business not only does cause to increase of wealth of the person which makes it possible to procurement more things than before but also leads into a flourishing community as it employs lots of work labors who are able to pay their costs of their life and content their needs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 710, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Line 4, column 64, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: increasing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, i feel, as a matter of fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8345323741 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7661805536 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575539568345 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.2905156727 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.588235294 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137903039301 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445821101535 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062501913941 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852598956132 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683527412041 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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